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Types of singers in Taiwan (2nd draft)

There are two types of singers in Taiwan, which (one refers to those who) are good at singing and the other refers to those who have a beautiful face in Taiwan (delete). Some singers have both advantages; some only have the (delete) one of the two advantages, and some have none of them. A famed (adj.) singer doesn’t mean that he or she has the two advantages at the same time. Because the songs which they sing have been polished up, we will feel that the songs are beautiful (I do not understand this). How come you mention the team singers in the following? Team singers have their characters (wrong word), for example SHE, 5566, etc. SHE is made up of three girls, one is low-pitched, one has sweet sound, and one is high-pitched. 5566 is made up of four men who are famous for a custom of Taiwan (What do you mean by this?). Jay is a male singer who gives me a deep impression. He sings his song(plural) with rap and inarticulacy. Some people say he is just like holding a meaty pellet in the mouth. Stefanie is a female singer whom I like. Because her songs are very suitable for me to sing, I like her. Jolin is a female singer, too. She sings very well and dances very gracefully. A-mei is a female singer and an aborigine who have (singular) a great sound. Everybody says aborigines are good at singing, because of their wonderful sound. In this paragraph, you have mentioned a lot of singers, but I do not see why they are related. You need explain their types and characteristis according to your classification in the very beginning.

Some singers are not only good at singing, but also have a pretty face, and dance very beautiful (adv.) such as Jolin. Some singers aren’t good at singing, but have a beautifully (adj.) face or good shape such as F4. Although, some singers don’t have a handsome or beautiful face but they are talent (adj.), sing and dance very well such as Jay. Every type of singers has their strong points and characters (rewrite it to make the ideas clearer).


***I am sorry that I have to say your writing is a little bit messy. You have clear classification in the beginning, but suddenly there come a lot of singers without mentioning which type they belong to. You really need to reorganize your writing.