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Assignment 3 (2nd draft): Types of Singers in Taiwan

The type of singers in Taiwan is hard to be assorted. Singers all don’t hope to be set (Chinese English). They try to contact with the different channels (what do mean by this? Ideas are not clear). I categorize them into“compositional (singers as well as composers)”, “competent”, and “others” approximately.

At first, “compositional (singers as well as composers” means that they are able to compose a melody or write words for a song. “王力宏” is one of the compositional faction (建議改成 "the typical singers who can sing as well as compose at the same time) in Taiwan. and others are (建議改成 "This category also include")“周杰倫”, “徐若瑄”, “陶喆” ,”伍佰”, and so on. The forward examples I introduce (How about change this into "The ones that I just mentioned") are more famous for their ability (the most famous ones). Some of them (singers) are not good at composing or writing (delete), but they put in time and effort (How aobut change this into "have spent their time and efforts for it"), such as “哈林”,and ”伊能靜.

Second, “competent” means that they have a good ear and bravura for music. “孫燕姿”, “蔡依林”, “李玟” are all competent faction (do you mean "all belong to this category"?).

Finally, “others” includes (inclucde) many factions (inappropriate word) that are like “superficial”, “child-educated”, “corporate”, and so forth (I don't quite understand this, would you please rewrite this sentence?). “Superficial” means that they have a beautiful face, such as “楊丞琳” ,and “王心凌". “Child-educated”(?) means that they sing the songs that are meaninglessness (delete) for children, such as “阿雅”, and“水蜜桃姊姊”. “Corporate”(?) is new current (do you mean " a trend"?) recently. It is made up more than one. For example, some of them are “5566”, “K-ONE”, “七朵花”,and “SWEETY”. More and more singers wouldn’t like to be just a singer (do you mean" are not just satisfied with being a singer"?), they want to write words (lyrics) for a song, composing(原型動詞) a melody, play a drama, and write the (a) book that are about another skill except sing (ideas are not clear, would you please rewrite this part?).


***You have lots of good ideas, but your knowledge of grammar and sentence structure do not enable you to fully present your viewpoints. Please try to read more and develop a sense of what English sounds like. It is never too late to learn a thing, especially at your young age.